Credit: Adrian Borda
The nightmare before night :
Towering trees stood still,sorrounding Zoe and Lewis – they’re brother and sister .Darkness was approaching.The trees tips of the branches swayed to the whispers of the wind .” Lewis I don’t like it here.” Zoe whispered
.”Don’t worry,Zoe we’re going to be fine ,Lewis Said comfortingly .A crunch of a twig echoed thought out their ears from behind ;Zoe gave a sharp turn -soon followed by Lewis-only to lay their eyes upon the solider -like trees . “What was that ?” Zoe asked nervously.” Umm I’m not sure ,” Lewis replied anxiously. Suddenly, a cacophonous screech came from within the darkness of the trees . They were not alone …
Thoughts evoked Zoe’s mind of what hideous creature was lurking within this woods .Something or someone was creeping in this forest with them . A dark shadow was tiptoeing among the trees becoming closer and closer to Zoe and Lewis . In and out the shadow crept within the trees. One second it was there , the next it was gone .Was this some scary kind of game of hide and seek ? Lewis questioned himself . With both of them having lost track of where this ghoulish creature was they decided they could only do one thing . And so Zoe screamed “RUNNNN !!!!!!!! ”
This is powerful writing, Sophiana. It makes me feel tense while reading. I like the varied sentence structures (some short – ‘Darkness was approaching.’ – some with dialogue, some questions…) and the language you chose. Well done!
Great story, just wish it was longer. Awesome word choice and a good idea to write about… lots of suspense. Once again, awesome story, keep up the good work
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